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A low white sun ignited 
February's slush, 
crystals on the sidewalk, 

even her trash
had its color.

Plastic cups, 
coke cans,
a dead rabbit,
rotting cardboard,

I can't hate The Wasteland.

Mother 
who's incubated 
a striving resenment,

drives my sidestep 
to watch cars 
fume and glisten,
listen to the radio,

get up for work on Monday and
smoke on the dock.






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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Student Writer
This is extremely evocative. :heart:
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
thank you :)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner May 16, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'll be liberal in this interpretation:

The protagonist of this story is a worker on the docks who has to go through the daily routine of walking from one point to another, and along the way, these are the sights that he sees often. The sights can be taken symbolically, or literally. I choose to see them as the latter rather than the former (mostly because I feel they're meant to be taken that way).

I would like to know the purpose of the title though :) Apart from that, the delivery was solid - because it felt like a straightforward flow without being too overwhelming - the balance of the theme and the symbolism (implied or otherwise) is well maintained, and overall, its a good decent work. :)
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014
the bell jar is a novel by sylvia plath, in which shes smothered by the monotony of her suburban existence. ties in with the reference to wasteland (and in turn gatsby) which have similar seems.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
T.S. Eliot's The Wasteland, right? Or another work?

Fitzgerald's Gatsby

and Sylvia Plath's The Bell Jar

(nodding) I've read the first two, but not the third.

I feel that the wastelands by Eliot was a poem with too many obscure references for the general public, and meant as a joke for the literature reading folk. Which is surprising because he was capable of a lot better.

Gatsby's suburban existence revolved around Gatsby ^^; from what I had read of Gatsby, he was the main anchor around which the book revolved - and in the end, when he died, the environment had become a monotonous suburban existence...

Unless you are meaning to imply the smaller things which are noticed while in such a situation, in which case, yes, those three might have those references and I missed them out entirely. Either way, its an opinion, no harm done unless a bunny was killed in the process of commenting on this work
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014
no, as in, fitzgerald's reference to the wasteland in gatsby lol
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh... Why didn't I notice that :noo:
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XTRQS Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014
Evocative imagery.
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014
thank you!!
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